Hello. My name is Mary . My hometown is a nice village . There are no tall buildings . But there are many small houses . The sky is blue . The clouds are white .The air is fresh and clean . The lakes are big . There is a briage over the lake. You can see many fish in the lake . I can fishing in it . That’s fun. People can wash the clothes in  lakes too. There are many mountains near the lake . Sometimes I cimb mountains with my mom . There are many green garss and tall trees near the river . The little children can walk and run on the grass . There are a lot of fresh fruits in my hometown. I love it very much. Welcome to my hometown!

点评：小作者用优美的词句介绍着她美丽的家乡，家乡迷人的自然风光，民俗风情等，条理分明，井然有序。不仅写了看到的，还写出了想到的，而且写得有主有次。结尾以简洁明快的语言写出了对家乡的热爱之情。